After reading some of Mateja's work, I can honestly say that she has definitely developed as a writer. While I was going through her first essay, I just felt like she was trying way too hard to fit into the world of upper-level English classes. For example, in her opening paragraph of her first essay, she was talking about dissecting, debating, and learning. It simply doesn't sound natural, and it reminds me alot of what one of my teacher's said about writing in one's own voice, "Sheesh you guys, you don't have to throw out words that are unnatural to you. If you don't understand what you are saying, then it will translate into your writing. Just write how it feels most natural, and it will just come. Yeesh."
When I got to her final essay, however, I was so happy. This essay just seemed so natural, and not so forced. I loved how she was describing her roommate by using all the hyphenated adjectives. I loved the way she described herself as a 13 year old kiddo and as a college student. I believe voice is something everybody struggles to find, but once it is found, it translates so beautifully on paper.
Posted by bvaldez1988 on December 8, 2008
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